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Week 12, Perfect Paragraph

Submitted by vvikhrev on Sat, 04/14/2018 - 13:36

Sjogren's syndrome, also known as Sicca's syndrome, is an autoimmune disease that affects various organs (pancreas and the liver) and causes severe dryness in the mouth and eyes. There are various studies on this disease but scientists are still trying to figure out the genetic and/or environmental causes. A study done in 2013 by Christopher J. Lessard looks at "variants at multiple loci implicated in both innate and adaptive immune responses are associated with Sjögren’s syndrome." The contributors to this study formed a database to contain all the information about the disease in one place along with the various case studies, in order to bring awareness to Sjogren's syndrome. Something interesting about treatment of this disease, is the invention of artificial tears to combat the extreme dryness of the eyes. Because of the long list of symptoms, it has become difficult to identify a single cause as well as a well-rounded treatment plan.



The comma is not needed in the third to last or second to last sentence. Otherwise, solid paragraph and nice quote integration. 

You should split the first sentence into two sentences.