The creature was a bilaterally symmetrical living organism, approximately 50mm in length, with the physical make up and attributes of a maggot. It moves similar to a caterpillar; it consistently moved once being place in the dish except for when touched or when the dish was disturbed. It was brown in color but also slightly transparent allowing the observer to see structures within the main body. It had multiple sets of small legs, six to be precise, a proportionally long tail, approximately 35mm in length, and what appears to be a mouth like structure. It did not seem to have much control of the tail and also seemed to have a defense mechanism of freezing up when it was touched or when the dish was disturbed. Many questions still remain, what is this organism exactly, what does it eat and what is its normal environment, are just a few examples of the many fundamental questions that still remain.
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The first sentence is a run
The first sentence is a run on sentence. I would advise to revise the first sentence and split into two separate ideas. I would use more precise language when descibing the organism. Also there are multiple places in the paragraph where commas are not needs. I would suggest splitting up certain thoughts instead of putting them into the same sentence .
Try using "it" less and
Try using "it" less and instead say "the organism" or "the specimen provided".