HeLa cells were stolen from Henrietta Lacks without her knowledge of full consent, while she was in John Hopkins hospital seeking radium treatment for her cervical cancer, scientist George Gey sought the opportunity, while Henrietta was unconscious during surgery, to have a surgeon collect her cancerous tissue cells to be used for his research on growing a human immortal cell line. To Gey’s astonishment the cells grew perfectly and survived longer than any of the cells he had cultured before, and the rest is scientific history. Yet what science seems to forget is the woman behind the cells and how unethical scientific research was during the 1950’s to the early 1990’s. During that forty year time span many critical and obstructive research occurred all over the United States and possibly all over the world with no laws or pre-dispositions to help regulate the safety and prosperity of the subjects and/or victims of these various scientific research experiments, some of who did not even know they were being used for research purposes such as Henrietta Lacks herself or even her family.
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There are way to many commas in the first sentence. The first sentence should be broken up into multiple sentences.
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When referring to Herietta Lacks, after first introducing her, you should refer to her as lacks, instead of Herietta. This will make it more formal
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Given the title, I assume this is meant to demonstrate the conflict of taking someone's tissue samples without their permission and the medical advances that may have developed due to this act. I would try to demonstrate this more in the first sentence and then begin telling HeLa's story. I also agree with the first comment, that introductory sentence should be overhauled and broken down into 2-3 sentences.