When I had to think of the significance that the research my group might conduct, I thought about what is already known about the UMASS campus, including its reputation, its goals, and the possible potential of this university. If sustainability and taking care of the environment is something that UMASS strives for and cares for, then this kind of research can provide some kind of data to management facilities, students, and research facilities. This information can include not only ways to create a sustainable environment but also a means to evaluate whether or not all of the hard work that people have put into the "campus climate" is actually paying off and worth it. For instance, if you look at all of the trees on this campus, you can tell how much work has been put into managing them. However, it is important to ask yourself if it was all worth it. What kind of benefit does it bring to our society? Is it sustainable for the present-day and more importantly, for the future? Our research can provide some kind of feedback on that by measuring biodiversity/species diversity in the soil around various campus trees because species diversity is a great indicator of sustainability. Sustainability is important for the college campus.
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The second to last sentence
The second to last sentence is a little wordy but other than that, this is well written
First sentence
the first sentence is not necessarily needed and seems wordy for a scientific piece of writing.
The last sentence is either
The last sentence is either misplaced (said too late) or not needed