I went to the conservatory located near Morrill I N. It is in between that building and berk. It was my first time there so it was actually kind of cool seeing lots of plants there. It was like a greenhouse filled with plants. I used a small wooden door that had a sign that said "open 10-4 pm". The first room I entered was small and cool in temperature yet warmer than outside as it was very windy and chilly. The next room was very warm and it was like a tropical grassland as my glasses fogged up by its warm temperature. The plant I found was in the first room I entered which was on the cooler side, as soon as I entered I looked to the right to find this lovely pink flower with yellow seed-looking things in the middle of it. It reminded me a bit of the traditional korean flower as it is pink and has some stuff in the middle as well. I found it interesting that a beautiful flower like that was in the colder room instead of the warmer room near it with a small bridge in it. I saw some coy fish in the little pond that they had in the other room, however my plant was in the room before going into the room with the pond.
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This all sounds far too casual and contains unnecessary information such as the koi fish. I would recommend including only the information relevant to taking the plant picture rather than telling a story.
I would recommend removing
I would recommend removing extraneous information.
Try to be more specific when
Try to be more specific when it comes to the location of the conservatory. Don't abbreviate "Berkshire" to "berk".