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Submitted by mkomtangi on Fri, 02/02/2018 - 14:28

Both articles seem to contain level 1 headings for the main title of each article (centered and bold-faced) however, the sub-titles for each section of the articles contain level 2 headings that are left-aligned and bold-faced. Each section of the articles are structured in steps, such as the steps and processes the scientists took to develop and conduct their experiments. It breaks down the processes of the experiment so it is much easier to read, understand, and analyze. Each section identifies what part of the experiment has been conducted and gives a detailed analysis of what occurred or what results were recorded. The first paragraph of each section gives a small intro into what the section will discuss a little background knowledge and a transition from one paragraph to another. It appears that the paragraphs in both articles contain a logical flow of ideas as the ideas are organized in almost a chronological order of occurrence during the experiment. However, I would say that the first article has better flow of topic sentences, while the second article is more chopped and could be read in sections without going through the entire article.

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In the last sentence, I don't think that "However" is necessary, as you aren't contradicting what you said in the prior sentence. 

Avoid judgments, like "seem". Make simple, declarative statements that assert what you believe are true and back them up with citations or data.

In your last sentece after however it might flow better if you added an "a" before better or something similar to that.

"I would say that the first article has better flow of topic sentences,"

"I would say that the first article has a better flow of topic sentences,"

"I would say that the first article has the better flow of topic sentences,"