Creature is presented in what appears to be a larval stage and is very resembling of a maggot. While it maintains movement the body can be seen through a distorted outer layer or casing. The body is segmented much like that of a worm and the movement is controlled through contracted motions that inch the creature along. The body appears to be in two segments the further end with what appears to be some sort of tail or appendage resembling that of a rat, with the last millimeter or so being exposed from the casing showing the thin black structure underneath. Atop the head two antennae can be seen bilaterally. Lack of any visible eyes suggests that this animal does not rely on vision (at least at this stage) , and the contracted movement points to a possible burrowing behavior perhaps contracting forward as if to push dirt or soil out of the way. From the frontal portion of the head an appendage can be seen repeatedly coming in an out exposing what is most likely some sort of mouth or perhaps an apparatus for the sense of smell. There are thin black structures bilaterally on the sides that seem to be legs that are pushed up against the sides of the casing, leading to suggest that when this enters adult hood it could potentially be the larval stage of some sort of fly or fly-like creature. This maggot stretches out at about 2.5 cm with its tail starting at exactly half its body length at 1.25 cm. The body is thin and is only about 0.1 cm in width. The thin black tail underneath the outer casing can be seen extending from its tip all the way to the center of the body on the inside. This could perhaps suggest that the tail is some sort of breathing apparatus as it is a direct tubing straight to the center of what would be the chest of the maggot. It could potentially provide air if this maggot were underwater or in dirt.
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You did a good job of describing the organism. The words you used, "bilaterally, appendage, and antennae" really help paint a good picture of the organism. This is probably because it was written in such a short time, but there are some mistakes with the flow of the sentences, it gets choppy at some times.
my response to this description
Overall I think this is a good description of the maggot. Im not a grammer expert but i think the sentance "atop the head... can be seen bilaterally," might be written incorrectly, as the word bilaterally should describe the bilaterall antennae, not the way the antennae are seen. in the last sentence the word "potentially" is unneccessary as the it starts with "it could." same goes for other words like "perhaps" and some other words throughout. otherwise it all seems concise and well written to me.