About 90% of the birds are monogamous. In order to choose the best fit mate must be done carefully. The quality females look for depends on the species. For example, the red-winged blackbird females will bese their choice depending on how much resource the male has in his territory. The more territory and resources the male has, the more females are attracted. On the other hand, the long-tailed widowbirds females are attracted to males that have a longer tail. The preference of usually is besed on appearance or territory for most females but some species ask for both qualities to be sufficient. Most females will stay with one male and the male will do the same. However, if the female decides that the male is not good enough, she will reproduce with a different male to increase the success in reproducing.
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the topic sentence does not introduce what you are going to be discussing, maybe add on why that first statement matters for your paragraph.
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Work on the grammar here; second, third sentences. Also, instead of using "ask for both qualities to be sufficient" you could say "prefer for...". "Is not good enough" in the last sentence could be replaced with "Is not to her standards", to me it just sounds better. Overall content is good.
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Be careful with the wording, it isn't clear what you meant by the second sentence, but I assume that you mean the process of selecting a mate must be done carefully.