The specific aims of this experiment would be to determine how the depth of the seeds in the sand they are planted in effects the growth and development of the seedlings. To demonstrate this we will be planting the seeds from Silybum marianum at different depths in sand. Sand is the typical terrain these plants grow in. They will be buried at depths of 2, 4, 6, 8, and 10 centimeters respectively. There will be three seedlings planted at each depth so we can account for any outliers, and to make sure we get at least one to germinate. After being buried the seeds will be put into the morrill greenhouse so they can stay at a constant temperature. When the seeds finally sprout out of the sand we will measure their lengths and compare the differences between the different seeds depths. That way we will find out what the effect of depth is on the development of Silybum marianum seeds.
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Just fix the grammar and word structure in the first sentence so it is easier to read.
This is a very interesting
This is a very interesting experiment I just hope your group have enough time to collect data and to see the seeds growth.
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I would suggest being more open to utilizing commas in your sentences to aid in their structure and clarity. For example, adding in a comma in your second sentence: "To demonstrate this, we will be..."