You are here

Manakins Perfect Paragraph

Submitted by tokiokobayas on Thu, 02/28/2019 - 15:55

     Male manakins are most popularly known for the “moonwalk” dance in order to attract potential female partners. This unique and amusing type of dance plays a crucial role in attracting a female manakins. The dance mainly consists of movements and sounds which includes fast movements up and down the branch (the “moonwalk”), snapping their wings to make noise, shooting between his perch and his surroundings, flying in circles around then swooping, and finally spinning to reveal their bright yellow legs. By utilizing this behavior, they attract potential mating partners, and the variations in the mating dance is what causes attraction in females. These variations can be observed and recorded, and behavioral flow charts can then be constructed to determine what specific variations cause female attraction, as well as what causes attention retention to increase in females.

Post:

Comments

Be sure to specify what exactly "manakins" are in the introduction of your paragraph, otherwise this may lead to confusion for the reader. 

Personally, I feel like the word 'most' can be removed from the first sentence for a better flow. Also, make sure when you make a word plural, it grammatically is correct in the sentence. So, in the second sentence, I would either remove 'a' or make 'manakins' singular. 

Explain what manakins are before discussing their mating rituals, although "wings" points to bird, its still a good idea to introduce them.