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A UMass Interspecific Relationship (Perfect Paragraph #2)

Submitted by tokiokobayas on Thu, 01/31/2019 - 17:32

    At the University of Massachusetts, Amherst, there lies an interspecific interaction that in principle is dangerous, yet seems to be a regular occurrence for the majority of dormitories. At the university, access to the dormitories require a specific ID in order to unlock the doors. These ID’s are only acquired if a person is given permission to own one and is approved by the university. This includes paying expensive housing fees, attending the university itself, and paying tuition. In essence, there is a very high requirement in order to gain access into any of these buildings. Yet on the contrary, if you happen to catch a resident leaving the building at the same time someone else is trying to enter it, it is likely that the resident will exit the building, and then hold the door open for the other person so they can go inside. This occurs so frequently, that it’s very likely that if someone were to wait outside one of these dormitories, eventually someone will notice and invite them in. The buildings are so easy to get into, that it begs the questions as to why we have ID card authorization as a security measure. I hypothesize that its functionality serves as a formality, rather than as security like it was originally intended.

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Interspecific implies (at least) two species. What's the other species?

I felt you used the word "it" too many times. The sentence, where you wrote "trying to enter it, it is likely..." I do not think it was appropriate to use the same word in a row because the two "it" mean a different thing. 

I think you can shorten the sentence talking about a resident leaving and holding the door open. To something like "Yet on the contrary, if you happen to catch a resident leaving the building at the same time you are trying to enter it, it is more than likely that the resident will hold the door for you."