Acute flaccid myelitis (AFM) is a disease that nearly resembles polio in which the disease includes cold like symptoms followed by loss of muscle control and paralysis of arms or legs. Approximately sixty-two cases have been reported around the States in about twenty-two states. Scientists have slowly, but surely narrowed down suspects in which this disease could be caused by. The enterovirus D68 (EV-D68) was narrowed down to be a possible suspect. Although the evidence doesn’t completely make this assumption conclusive EV-D68 is suspected by many scientists. This enterovirus spreads through saliva and mucus and causes similar cold like symptoms and sudden loss of muscle control. Kenneth Tyler of the University of Colorado (CU) School of Medicine in Aurora reported that several strains of EV-D68 could cause paralysis in mice. EV-D68 seemed to attack nerve cells directly causing this loss of control. If the enterovirus is indeed causing the paralysis, scientists are still unsure exactly of why it is only doing so in few cases. Although there is no vaccine against EV-D68, a possible vaccine developed in China had shown positive results in mice.
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weird wording
very interesting subject and overall well written, just the third sentence is giving me some confusion. It seems like you meant to say that scientists have been narrowing down suspects of diseases causing these symptoms but the wording," narrowed down suspects in which this disease could be caused by" is confusing
Different structure and punctuation
i think you should have structured the paragraph better. Right after your introductory sentence, you talked about symptoms, which I believe is an ideal way to follow but then you jumped to talking about cases. Later on you repeated the symptoms and mentioned modes of transmission. I think they should all have followed the introductory sentence, preceding the statistical information.
Different structure and punctuation
i think you should have structured the paragraph better. Right after your introductory sentence, you talked about symptoms, which I believe is an ideal way to follow but then you jumped to talking about cases. Later on you repeated the symptoms and mentioned modes of transmission. I think they should all have followed the introductory sentence, preceding the statistical information.
suggestion
You mention at the end that there is a possibility of a vaccine in China, maybe explain more what type of vaccine it is and what that can exactly mean. "Although there is no vaccine against EV-D68, a possible vaccine developed in China had shown positive results in mice. "