The organism's body moves in a clear tandem, often displaying repetitive motions as it moves. Both ends of the organism move; yet, they seem as if they are separately controlled. It seems as though each end has a mind of its own. It has many short legs and displays odd body movements at times. The organism’s body appears to exhibit bilateral symmetry. Often, it stops to ingest the food present. The body is segmented, similar to millipedes. The anterior end contains darker pigmentation. There are small, brown spots along both sides of the body. Short hairs are examined along the body. It moves solely around the perimeter of the container. Two short legs are present at the end of the body, appearing to expand and contract. The front six legs appear to point out, similar to true legs, whereas the ten back legs are flatter and more circular. It can rollover if stuck on its side or back. There are two segments between the front and back legs that do not contain legs.
Comments
Observations about behavior
The terminology you used describing movement and appearance was great. I think you should have gone more into depth about the behavior of the larva. For example, how it used its true legs to feel-out its immediate environment before deciding to move forward.
sentence structure
overall great. The one thing I would suggest is to try and combine certain sentances. some are very short and awkward and could be incorporated into a longer better flowing sentence.
Very descriptive, though I
Very descriptive, though I think it could be a little more organized. You seem to go back and forth between describing the appearance of the worm and its movement, and I think you need a way to relate them together. Maybe try commenting on an aspect of its appearance followed by how it contributes to movement.