The spider is small, about an inch in size and very thin. It is a white and black spider with a small body seperated into two parts. The body kind of looks like an exclamation mark in microsoft word, the top being long and thin leavdng into a circular part. The 8 legs are coming off of this ciruclar part and are about an inch in length but are curled up. Each leg has two large bends and one slight bend almost making the shape of the letter n with a tail. The legs all come off the circular part going up at amost a 90 degree angle. At the first bend in the spiders legs, there is a band of black with a stripe of whitegoing across it in the middle of the joint. The legs are quick when he moves and allow it to get anywhere in the cup quickly. The spider doesn't like to be on the cup itself, he likes to be on the web atleast partially. The web is not visible so it almost looks as if the spider is floating. Shaking and tapping of the cup itself casued the spider to move away from where the tapping would be. It was trying to get out whenever the cup was moved. If I covered the spot where the spider was then it would move to an open part of the cup and poke at the cup. I think it's main priority was to get out of the cup.
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Make sure to check for typos!
Make sure to check for typos! Other than that you will likely need to be more definitive in your writing. There is a lot of "about's", "almosts" and other phrases that make it seem as if you are unsure.
Watch how you refer to the spider
This paragraph contains good detail on the spider's appearance and movements, but there are times where you attribute ideas to the spider that are not necessarily true. Anthropomorphizing animal subjects should be avoided in scientific writing, so you should avoid saying things like " the spider doesn't like" because there is not a precise way of knowing the spider's likes or dislikes. Also, avoid putting your own thoughts on the subject, like the sentence "I thik it's main priority was to get out of the cup". Again, this is not really known and the use of personal pronouns should be avoided.
Hi, your paragraph is good
Hi, your paragraph is good but there are a lot of details and assuming. It's ok if you don't know because no one knows the right measure unless you measure the spider