When the front end of the insect was inspected, there was what could be assumed to be its mouth, colored a slight orangery-red with a black outline surrounding it on most sides. Between the black lines and the thorax, on the bottom of the organism, was the most red component; a small red circle. Shaped like a leaf with its top cut off, the head had a tiny black dot on the top with a black outline around its rim. The front end of the head had a series of tiny black eyes, too small to accurately count without magnification. Two tan, tubular components were at the front of the head, and it was assumed that they were related to its ability to eat. But upon closer inspection of the front end of the insect, the aforementioned structures where the assumed mouth was began to look more like small apendages. Therefore, it was assumed that this organism was a member of the arachnid family due to the presence of eight legs.
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Good paragraph. Watch out for
Good paragraph. Watch out for unnecessary punctuation marks.
Really great imagery- makes
Really great imagery- makes it easy to visualize the insect ! Avoid too much usage of words like "assume".
thank you
I didn't realize I used the word assume 3 times until you mentioned it!