The leg appendages of the spider have at least two joints where they bend. The first joint is located about 1cm up the leg. This first joint is colored somewhat darker than the rest of the spider’s body. The second leg joint is located about 1cm from the first. This joint also had a darker colored section, though it was followed by a lighter, almost translucent, section of leg. There is a likely another joint present where the leg meets the thorax, allowing for better movement of the spider.
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The paragraph is very descriptive, yet the introduction sentence is not captivating. The topic senetnce should be a little more interesting to catch the readers attention.
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I enjoy the concise nature of your paragraph and the prose. My suggestion for improvement could be to expand on your paragraph a tad bit more.
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My suggestion for improvement in scientific writing is that you omit unnecessary words and phrases, for example in "followed by a lighter, almost translucent", you could write instead translucent or lighter.