When the spider is stationary on its legs, its body does not touch the ground. At the moment, one of its legs is pointed upwards, almost as if it is trying to sense its surroundings. It is hard to tell where the web in the cup starts and ends. As I flip the cup over, the spider remains in its place despite previously appearing to be on the surface of the cup, suggesting that the spider was in its web the entire time. It is possible that the spider’s web extends throughout the entire cup since it appears to exist on opposite surfaces. This could give us clues as to how long the spider has been in the cup, especially if we are aware of the rate of its web-making. Perhaps the spider has been creating more of its web as I have been writing. Although I accidentally bumped the cup and sent the spider into a frenzy, it has calmed down. Overall, the spider is very calm in its environment.
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Past tense
Scientific writing should be consistently in past tense (except for universal truths (e.g. "The sun rises in the East") and proposals, where the Research Design will be in future tense.
The paragraph was well worded
The paragraph was well worded but I feel like in order for it to be more scientific it should have more statements explaining what the spider is doing and why, as opposed to it could be doing this.