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Arms Race Between humans and Diseases Perfect Paragraph

Submitted by rdigregorio on Thu, 02/28/2019 - 12:19

The arms race between diseases and the human race will never end. It is something that  mankind will always have to find a way to cope with. There are certain measures we can take to slowdiseases down that we try and perfect every year. Viruses like the Flu though, are quickly evolving which makes it very hard to have and make vaccines to suppress them. (“The Escape of Pathogens: an evolutionary arms race”) It is important to keep trying to take these measures though as we must try and prevent as many people as possible from getting disease. The only way to do this is to study the evolutionary processes of these diseases so we are better equipped to fight them. It is at least known for bacteria that we can use anti-biotics to treat the diseases even though we constantly have to manipulate them; for viruses this is not the case. (“Antibiotic resistance: delaying the inevitable”) Antibiotics will not kill the viruses and this will just harm you in the long run by allowing it to flurish.

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Watch for grammar errors. You say "slowdiseases" which needs a space. You also have a senetence that reads "measure though as we must try" where I would eliminate the word though, or just try to readjust the structure of your sentence.

In the third sentence you don't need at comma after "though", but you could put one between "quickly evolving" and "which". Also I would suggest rewording the second part of that sentence to make it flow a bit better. 

I suggest you read through when you're done to correct the minor errors you might have. Also I can't quite figure out what the conclusion is from the paragraph. What would you like the reader to take out of the text? I think you should consider this in subsequent entries.