Diabetic neuropathy is one of the major health complications found in people with diabetes across the globe. The many causes and symptoms of neuropathy have been widely studied, but the best way to improve preexisting neuropathy or prevent neuropathy from happening has yet to be found. One method of both preventing and improving diabetic neuropathy that has been studied is exercise. Studies have found positive effects of various forms of exercise on different types of patients with diabetes. Previous studies have attempted to identify the role and potential benefit of exercise in diabetic neuropathy. To better delineate the benefit of exercise in type 1 diabetes we propose to conduct a 3-month study comparing the effects of aerobic vs. resistance exercise on neuropathy
Comments
Use specific terms, do not
Use specific terms, do not use words like "many"
"best way" is a subjective diction so don't use it
Sentence structure
Some sentences can be reorganized to have stronger structure. For example: "One method of both preventing and improving diabetic neuropathy that has been studied is exercise" can be changed to "Exercise has been studied as one method of preventing and improving diabetic neuropathy."
Using the phrase "best way"
Using the phrase "best way" should be avoided as it sounds a bit subjective. In the last sentence who is "we"?