Update on the Unknown Organism (Larva)
The larva was given a peel of clementine skin. The organsim reacts be exploring the peel and proceeds to crawl beneath the tender, white, inner portion of the skin and appears to be eating the peel. Later, the organism remains still, lying beneath the peel. When disturbed, the larva retreats and clings onto the white portion of the skin. Over the course of three days, the organism changes physically and behaviorally. Changes include darkening of the skin, the spots along the side of the organsim, as well as the legs.There is also a decrease in activity and lesser response to disturbances (such as shaking the container). On the third day with the peel introduced, the organism does not seem to be eating the skin, but simply remains still, rarely moving beneath the white side of the clementine peel.
Comments
Small grammar changes
In sentence 2 switch the word "be" for "by". And in between sentence 6 and seven just include a space. I really like the chronological flow of the paragraph.
The descriptive words were
The descriptive words were helpful in describing what the larvae was doing and what changes occurred thoughout the days.
Avoid passive voice
Try to avoid passive voice in scientific writing.