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Larva Observations

Submitted by lgarneau on Sat, 01/26/2019 - 14:11

An unknown organism, most likely a larva, is off-white in color and measures approximately ¾ an inch long. The larva, when left unbothered, seems rather ordinary. Upon stimulation, such as flipping the container, the organism seems to react. The reaction was predictable as the organism seemed startled. However, a significant reaction occurred when a light was shined onto the organism. The larva ran away from the light every time it was put directly overtop it. This finding may shed light onto the typical environments the organism thrives in and lives in. An assumption can be made that the organism may be used to living underground such as in the soil because of this finding. Another minor observation that may further this prediction was that the unknown organism resembles that of a grub and may belong to the grub family. Because of this educated guess about its ancestors, it could further explain the type of environment the organism usually lives in.

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cynthiaguzma

Sat, 01/26/2019 - 18:54

A tip would be focusing more on what the organism you were looking at looks like. So describing the shape of the organism and also any features of it that stand out to you. Also try not to begin a sentence with because. 

A suggestion would to combine some sentences to make them less 'wordy' and describe what you want to say in fewer words. For example, the sentences "Upon stimulation, such as flipping the container, the organism seems to react. The reaction was predictable as the organism seemed startled.", you could combine them by saying "Upon stimulation, such as flipping the container, the organism had a startle response as predicted."

tokiokobayas

Mon, 01/28/2019 - 22:59

  • Grammatical errors include too much usage of commas and wrong tenses (the organism seemed to react)
  • Try being more concise with your sentences!
     - "...thrives in and lives in" --> "lives in"
     - "Another observation that may further this prediction" --> "Another observation that supports this prediction" 
  • There wasn't a lot of phenotypic observations made besides it's size. You could try describing its physical characteristics more imo

I really liked how you shined the light on the maggot, and elaborated on why its response may lead us to believe it possibly lives underground. Elaborating on your hypotheses is really nice.