The organism (worm or larvae) has a long, flexible, and segmented body. It's skin is a light tan color in most areas with a slightly translucent space along its spine. On either side of each segment, a dark brown or black dot can be found. It has 6 true legs on the front half of the body and has extensions on the back segments to help propel it forward. The worm moves very quickly, constantly runs over its food, poking it but then continuing on its way. I think it could be too stressed or stimulated to eat. The head of the organism is a redish brown contracting the light coloration of the body and features two large eyes and a small mouth. It also has tiny hair like structures on its face and along its body. Perhaps it uses those structures and facial features as sensory organs to survey its surroundings.
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Very nice description of the
Very nice description of the organism, and you go into depth well enough tyhat I can invision what you are describing in my head. If I could change something it would be to better organize your paragraph so it is easier for the reader to follow along with your thoughts, and also maybe go even further into your description so that it can be as detailed as possible.
You usually want to at least
You usually want to at least make an attempt to quantify things that can be quantified. "The worm moves very quickly" does not give the reader a very good idea of what is actually going on. The amount of time it takes the worm to complete a lap around the perimeter of the dish (of known circumference), would be a great way to quantify this.
Re-read
One suggestion I have is to re-read the paragraph to make sure you catch any small mistakes. For example, there is a minor spelling issue where is says "redish" it should be "reddish". Also re-reading may help with organization and flow of the paragraph.