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Golden retriever PP

Submitted by msalvucci on Fri, 10/26/2018 - 13:24

A new retrovirus has the potential to kill off thousands of dogs breeds across the nation, and it is our duty to determine which dog breed should be saved. I argue that a vaccine should be given to Golden Retrievers because these dogs are a family favorite and should be saved for their wonderful qualities.

A high percentage of dog owning families have Golden Retrievers, making them an extremely popular breed. It would be a shame to kill off a breed that is such common household pet. It makes sense to save a breed that is so common in order to save a high amount of families from feeling despair and mourning. Additionally, these dogs are considered fully grown at the age of one; it would be smart to save a breed that is full grown at an early age so that the virus isn’t killing off a high percentage of puppies. Saving this breed would save the virus from harming a large amount of innocent puppies.

            Additionally, golden retrievers are loveable, friendly, and cuddly, making them a household favorite. Young kids typically think of their family’s pet golden retriever as another sibling, and it would be catastrophic to their emotional well-being to take away a piece of their family. Golden Retrievers are loyal pets; it would be upsetting to put them in danger after seeing how loyal they are to their owners.

            It would make sense to vaccinate Golden Retrievers because they are one of the most common household breeds. They are easy to train and always compatible with strangers. Golden Retrievers have a great sense of safety, and always protect their owners. For example, some Golden Retrievers notice when humans need help when swimming and jump in after them to save them from drowning. Their protective and intelligent qualities make them a smart breed to vaccinate to benefit this planet. Additionally, Golden Retrievers usually have litter sizes ranging from four to twelve puppies. As they are great breeders, the population size of these dogs would flourish due to reproduction.

            While it is unfortunate that dog breeds are being wiped out due to a retrovirus, it is important to distinguish reasons to save one breed over another. The great qualities and characteristics of Golden Retrievers makes them a great choice to vaccinate.

 

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"A high percentage of dog owning families have Golden Retrievers, making them an extremely popular breed.” This sentence is redundant.. maybe state that they are an extremely popular breed then give a specific percentage, otherwise you are just stating that they are popular twice, but in different wording.

A high percentage of dog owning families have Golden Retrievers, making them an extremely popular breed. It would be a shame to kill off a breed that is such common household pet. It makes sense to save a breed that is so common in order to save a high amount of families from feeling despair and mourning. Additionally, these dogs are considered fully grown at the age of one; it would be smart to save a breed that is full grown at an early age so that the virus isn’t killing off a high percentage of puppies. Saving this breed would save the virus from harming a large amount of innocent puppies.

 

In this paragraph, you start it by saying that they are a very common breed among families, but then halfway through you change to talking about their size. I would suggest trying to keep the paragraph more focused throughout 

I would suggest changing the word save in the sentence "Saving this breed would save the virus from harming a large amount of innocent puppies". In the context of the sentence "save" could be changed to "prevent" for a more logical sentence.