A map was included in the figure to show where the web was located. To avoid copyright issues, the map was taken as a screenshot from OpenStreetMap.org. To find the location, I typed in the closest permanent fixture near the bush which was Franklin Dining Hall. OpenStreetMap.org is not too detailed so I screenshotted a larger area to show more buildings and the whole Permaculture Garden. This screenshot was wider than it was tall. The screenshot showed from the Shade Tree Lab past Clark Hall and the grass area past Franklin. Due to the large area covered in the map, I included a red circle which showed the exact location of the web on the bush. In order to not confuse the viewer, I also constructed a key in the bottom right-hand corner that showed the same circle and wrote location of web next to it. The key was placed onto a white background that was outlined in black to make it easily seen.
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This paragraph could use some
This paragraph could use some improvement, such as a better flow. This could be fixed by organizing the paragraph's sentences better.
More Meat
I like how concise you kept this paragraph, however, I think it would serve some good to include a little more detail
Less Why and More What
I really liked reading your paragraph because the "why" of everything helped me understand your process. However, when writing scientifically in the METHODS I believe you are only supposed to write what you did and not why you did it. Really good job otherwise though!