We wanted to figure out how important the seed coat is to the germination of a seed. For our experiment we focused on six types of seeds, ranging from green peas to chickpeas. We soaked 30 seeds of each type then removed the seed coat of 10 seeds, nicked another set of 10 seeds, and left the remaining 10 seeds alone. The seeds were then placed in petri dishes with a moist paper towel, all conditions being held constant. Over the course of four days we checked on the seeds every twelve hours. We noted the number of seeds that germinated and any other traits that stood out to us. Every type was photographed as well and uploaded into a shared folder. I was actually surprised about our results. I believed that seeds with a tampered seed coat would not germinate as well as a normal seed. However, the graphs reveal that for most types, seeds with a nicked coat germinated sooner and in greater numbers. From handling the seeds, I also believed that seeds with a thicker coat may actually germinate faster if they are nicked. Again, there was no distinct difference found between seeds of thick or thin coats. If we had more time to run this experiment again I would have liked to use seeds of varying coat thickness. From our results, I feel that I cannot confidently concluded anything significant from our data since it was such a small data set. We found some results that would suggest nicking the seed coat would allow for the seed to germinate more efficiently, but more evidence is required to make that statement statistically significant. |
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"From our results, I feel
"From our results, I feel that I cannot confidently concluded anything significant from our data since it was such a small data set. We found some results that would suggest nicking the seed coat would allow for the seed to germinate more efficiently, but more evidence is required to make that statement statistically significant."
In this sentence, I would refrain from implying any emotion for a research project (i.e. "I feel") as we should keep it fairly concise and without any indication of feeling
stronger engagement
While the paragraph sends the message you intended, I think that the engagement could be better. The paragraph was boring to read, and various verbs can be used to strengthen your meaning. For example, "We wanted to figure out how important..." is overused. I think that using a word like vital is more engaging.
transition
When you go from the first sentence to the second sentence, it just seems a bit sudden and it feels almost as though they have nothing to do with each other. If you add that the method from sentence two was to test the aim that was proposed in sentence one, I think that would make the sentence wound more natural