The object observed in class has a long stem that is rigid at one end, suggesting it has been harshly plucked instead of cut. The stem has a dark red tint with a thin brown line on one side, which could be dirt or possible decay. The stem is very red at the point where it splits into three green leaves, but as the stem splits, it fades into a light yellow color throughout the vascular system of the leaves. The two leaves on the sides are small, with scalloped edges and dark green coloring. The middle leaf is elongated, is a lighter green color, also has scalloped edges, and it leans slightly to the left. The middle leaf also has two brown squiggles from leaf miners that may have resided there. The plant overall is not planar, as the middle leaf protrudes farther forward than the lateral ones. All 3 of the leaves come to a dull point at the tip, and they are bumpy due to the veins that run through them. The front side of the plant is a slightly darker color and has a waxy coating, while the backside is a lighter green and is a little rougher in texture. The leaves are also scaley or cracked, similar to the skin on the back of a human hand if one looks closely.
Comments
Prefer active voice
In the past, people recommended passive voice for scientific writing. Active voice is the current preference.
Changing Sentence Structure
Throughout most of the paragraph, most of the sentences start with the word "the." By changing the sentence structure and not starting with the same word for most of your sentences, it keeps the reader from falling into a pattern. For example, the last sentence could be changed to say "Similar to the skin on the back of a human hand, the leaves are scaley or cracked if one looks closely." By adding prepositional phrases and switching direct clauses with indirect clauses in your writing, you can create a more varied sentences.
3
spell out three instead of using the number
reply 11/14
I like this paragraph, and seems very detailed. However, you should use synonyms for some words such as "bumpy" as I believe there could be better sceintific terminology for those words.