Copper hospital beds kill bacteria. A new study has found that copper hospital beds in the Intensive Care Unit (ICU) harbored an average of 95 percent fewer bacteria than conventional hospital beds, and maintained these low-risk levels throughout patients' stay in hospital. In the United States, hospital beds are the 8th leading cause of death. This is not okay! The hospital should be a safe place to go when someone is already sick, not a place to receive more bacterias and infections. They are among the most contaminated surfaces in medical settings. This idea came from ancient Ayurveda, when drinking water was often stored in copper vessels to prevent illness. Additionally, copper has been previously studied to have antimicrobial properties.
This idea is new and is still being studied. To conduct an experiment for this, you need a control group, and a experimental group. Ex: comparing plastic beds with copper beds. Nearly 90 percent of the bacterial samples taken from the tops of the plastic rails had concentrations of bacteria that exceed levels considered safeAlthough these are not yet on the market, and will be costly, this will be beneficial for the future of our healthcare industry and microbe control.
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Topic Sentence
The first paragraph's topic sentence is very short. An improvement could be adding a reason why someone should care about copper hospital beds to catch the reader into continuing to read.
Expansion
One way to expand on your ideas is by adding information about the costs and comparing the cost of the copper bed with the costs of treating patients with infections due to the beds and sanitation costs
The "this is not okay!"
The "this is not okay!" changed the tone from scientific language to you projecting out to the reader as a friend. It seems a bit awkwardly placed