As we get closer to flu season it is important to think about getting the flu shot. The flu shot changes every year to keep up with the varying proteins on the virus. The vaccine is important for so many reasons. I myself used to forget or not bother to get the yearly vaccine, but now I make sure to get it every year to protect myself and everyone around me. Individuals who are immunocompromised cannot get vaccines, vaccines should be administed several weeks before the individual becomes immunocompromised. These immunocompromised individuals can be protected through herd immunity; when the majority of a population is vaccinated, the virus has a hard time infecting individuals. Therefore everyone should keep up with their flu vaccines to prevent contraction of the virus for themselves, as well as immunocompromised individuals who cannot recieve the vaccine and rely on others for protection.
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Instead of saying, 'The vaccine is important for so many reasons' give the exact amount of reasons you'll be talking about in this paragraph. This way the reader immediately knows what to expect from your writing.
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really like this as it is a relevant topic and flu season is surely in action. however, you should go in more detail about "immunocompromise" so those who do not know what it is can understand
it's a bit unnessesary
I really like this topic that being said, I think I myself is an awkward phrase and there seems to be a lot of unnecessary words in general perhaps you can try to get rid of them?