In Fall 2019, as part of the Junior Writing Class at the University of Massachusetts Amherst, I conducted a project to produce careful writing such that an exact replica of the obtained results can be reproduced. The Methods project is influenced by the idea that scientists must be able to carry out an experiment and reproduce the exact results if they were to also perform the experiment. The goal of the Methods project is to learn how to create a multi-panel scientific figure and ultimately compare an image with someone else’s replicate of your image, who has followed your outlined methods. The topic of the experiment was phytophagy or the eating of plants. The subject that was chosen for this experiment was a leaf with a hole in it. This was inspired by the simplicity of the subject.
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Link the Methods Project to the reference
You make it clear that you were assigned a project in the class at the university, but then it kind of jumps to talking about the methods project without linking the title "The Methods Project" to that reference. As a reader I am left to assume the Methods Project is what you were ssigned in that class at umass amherst.
Sentence variety
A majority the sentences start with "The" to add some variety perhaps start with "In the Methods project,...." to add some variety to the writing
extra words
I thought that the pharagraph was really good that it was detailed, but I thought that there were a bit too much unnessecary words that made it a bit harder to understand.