The studies that I have read about Stigmella multispicata have only been observed in siberian elms. So after class I drove up N Residential Drive to look at the 7 Siberian Elms that are growing there. I inspected each of the seven trees looking for linear mines in the leaves; this is the type of mine S. multispicata has been reported to leave. After a thorough search I am confident that there is no evidence of leafminer activity on any of the seven siberian elm trees at that location. So this is leaving me with the question “where did the leafminer suspected of being S. multispicata originate from?
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topic sentence
This needs a topic sentence.
Parenthetical clauses are friends
The first sentance could be worded differently, im rather found of paranthetical clauses (might be the wrong name for it). Its when you have a subject and you want to introduce additional descriptive information that isnt needed for a sentance to function. For example,
The studies that I have read about Stigmella multispicata, which have only been observed in siberian elms, were very interesting. (or any other statement related to the studies)
The only thing about that sentance is trying to focus the back half on S. multispicatta. As it reads now, its the studies that have been observed in Siberian Elms and they related to S. multispicatta..
Avoid starting sentances with "so" and just start the sentance with After. Commas help here too as a parenthetical clause can start a sentance. "I drove up N Residential Drive to look at the 7 Siberian Elms that are growing there" is a complete sentance, but a P. Clause can add the time element " After class, I drove up N Residential Drive to look at the 7 Siberian Elms that are growing there".
Much in the same manner the start of second sentance after it " After a thorough search..." needs that comma there, as that information isnt needed for the sentance and is just extra weight.