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NOV 30th notes and comment

Class, in the attachments below you will find a pdf of the powerpoint show I worked from in class class today (nov 30). Enjoy.

Also -- for your last assignment. Please hand in a complete paper, with all the fixin's. It should be a journal article, with data. There does not need to be lots of data. One figure is fine. It may be something you are currently working on with co-authors. If so, be sure to list them on the title page. Please hand in a hard copy, this is, paper (!) in class next week (Dec 7th). If you wish my comments, please include your campus mail address. Also please hand it in double spaced so I can scrible between the lines.

TB

Material for Elegance/Coherence lecture

Here is the Plant Cell paper I showed in class, and also the improved first paragraph from the introduction example uploaded for homework 4. Also, just for your interest, I uploaded a paper from 2007 Plant Journal where you can also look at the structure of an introduction. They are attached below.

TB's HOMEWORK THREE REVISIONS

Here is the file that I worked from in class on the ninth. The originals are on the left and my revisions on the right. Enjoy.

HOMEWORK Number 4

Class, here is the fourth assignment. This is due Tuesday Nov 30th, 9:00 am.

Write an introduction to your paper. For the purpose of this exercise write at least three paragraphs. It may be as long as you like. Use everything you have learned so far. As I have explained in class, your paper needs to be a paper presenting data, rather than a review.

When you upload, onto the Hmk-4 link, please upload a .pdf. Also please enter the title of your paper into the title field for the upload. You can put your name on the file name of the attachment (and a good idea also to put your name in the file itself).

Enjoy. TB

NEXT homework -- due Nov 9th

Class, here is your next assignment. As usual, please upload this by 9 am tuesday morning (nov 9th).

For this assignment, the attachment here (below) contains four examples. Choose one (just ONE!) of them to work with.

First: assess for concision, are there redundancies, or obvious inferences, or other words readily deleted? How about hedges and intensifiers? Label all of these things. To keep things consistent, use underlining for things to delete, purple highlight for intensifiers, and yellow highlight for hedges.

Second: does the author use resumptive, summative, or free modifiers? Label all the ones that you find. You can label these any way you like.

Third: For each of the paragraphs in your example, write a revision that has one of the three modifiers.

Finally, revise the paragraphs in any way you see fit. Provide brief comments on your revisions. As for the modifier sentences you practised writing for item three, keep them or toss them as you see fit.

When you are ready to upload, note that for homework three, there are four different books, one for each of the examples. Please be sure to upload your homework to the relevant example page. Also, please convert your file to a .pdf prior to uploading. Please do not upload .doc etc. Thank you.

You do not not need to work up any of the numbered exercises in Williams. However, if you have difficulty with these concepts, do one or two of of the odd numbered ones and compare your work to the "answers" at the back of the book.

Assignment two show

Class -- here is the pdf I worked from for Class on Tuesday Oct 26th. Dealing with a few examples from assignment two. Please feel free to e-mail me if you have specific questions.

Assignment TWO

Class, here is your next assignment. They are DUE to be uploaded by 9 am Oct 26th (that's a tuesday).

From a published article, find either an introduction or part of a discussion. Something that is about 4 paragraphs long would be good. Identify the topics and the stresses. Analyze them according to the criteria laid out in Williams. Revise as appropirate.

Upload the original text, your revision, and also your analysis. You may omit reference call-outs within the text for clarity (with the possible exception of where the reference serves as a character, as in "Jones et al. 2003 argued..." Part of the analysis should be the identification of topics/stress, but also please include some narrative about your assessment and choices for revision. Also be sure to include the citation (where you got the material).

You do not not need to work up any of the numbered exercises in Williams. However, if you have difficulty with these concepts, do one or two of of the odd numbered ones and compare your work to the "answers" at the back of the book.

Homework examples

Class -- here is the pdf that I showed in class, dealing with Homework one.

Homework One

Class,
Here is your first assignment:

Do the EVEN numbered exercises in 3.4, 3.5, 3.6, 3.7. And also in 4.1, 4.3, and 4.6.

Then, find a paragraph from a published paper in your discipline. Find the characters, subjects, actions, and verbs. Revise as needed.

Finally, find a paragraph from something you wrote previously. Find the characters, subjects, actions, and verbs. Revise as needed.

Class accounts

Class, to use this site most effectively it will be best if you activate your account. Use your netID and pass. Then after that you may change your pass, if you like. Questions? more information here: https://wahoo.nsm.umass.edu/findaccount/